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Candy Coated Tales Of Woe, 5 by ~Kaiya61:iconKaiya61:



Candy Coated Tales Of Woe Episode Five – Untitled


There was a little girl with a pretty little hat,
And a pretty pink bow, and a fluffy toy cat.
She would carry it around, and a pretty pink comb,
That she used every single day until her Mummy left home.

She’d shouted that she’d leave and that she’d never come back
And that Daddy was going to give her a panic attack.

Silence.

Dad said Mummy had to work and that’s why she left,
But she saw Mummy fall down, her back stained blood red.

Her Daddy said Mum’s back ‘was crying’,
And to go back to bed.

She heard the next-door neighbour
Say that Mummy was

“Wed?” asked the vicar; “Yes, your Mummy was wed.
To your Daddy, no less, in this church.” He said.
“It’s a shame about his problem.” And he tapped his head.

She thought about her Daddy when she walked back home.
She thought about her hat, with it’s pretty pink bow.
She thought about her fluffy cat, and her pretty pink comb.
Her Daddy wasn’t there, when she got back home.

She heard the next-door neighbour
Say that Daddy was

A drunken psychopath.

She never saw her Mummy or her Daddy again.
Endless foster homes and bad behaviour.

Whatever happened to the pretty little hat?
And the pretty little bow, and the fluffy toy cat?

The educational psychologist hazarded a guess,
That they had disappeared when
Daddy raped her.

Amen.
©2005-2010 ~Kaiya61
:iconkaiya61:

Author's Comments

The Candy Coated Tales Of Woe Episode Five - Untitled

I didn't think it called for a title.

I'm really not too sure about this one; i'll decide whether to keep it up based on the response i get.

:)

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:iconbrainstew76:
wow, that's really good. so sad :(
i really like your rhyme scheme, nice job :clap:

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How many corners do I have to turn?
How many times do I have to learn
All the love I have is in my mind?
:heart:
:iconcowell16:
very emotive and a good pace to the wording although not much candy coated this time

:+fav: i like
:iconkaiya61:
thankyou so much :) glad you like.

yea, i think it is a bit sad. i wasn't really aiming for much here so i was worried i fell short on the meaning side, but it seems to be ok :D

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en la lluvia, me prometisteis tu sangre..<3

asilos magdalena.
:iconkaiya61:
thankyou v much :hug:

well, i think the candy's in the rhyme-scheme this time, and maybe the pretty little hat :D

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en la lluvia, me prometisteis tu sangre..<3

asilos magdalena.
:iconcowell16:
yes the rhyme scheme was sweet aswell as the hat
:iconbrainstew76:
you're welcome :D
yes it is very good :)

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How many corners do I have to turn?
How many times do I have to learn
All the love I have is in my mind?
:heart:
:iconlordgothmog:
Not so much sweet as bitter, but I feel that this is very well written nevertheless!
:iconstraight-edged:
Like I said on MSN, this is bloody awesome

Seems to contain more emotion than the past 4. Definately one of the better of the series. Although, still loving the one I fav'd :D

But yeah, this one contains such absence with the story, until...the end. And it's a heart dropper

DAmn you

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^Spam.
:iconkaiya61:
thanks very much :)

--
en la lluvia, me prometisteis tu sangre..<3

asilos magdalena.

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